tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2688121174334319382.comments2012-10-06T11:46:56.100+02:00Random RamblingsAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17056976416268218470noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2688121174334319382.post-14905266920038458092012-10-06T11:46:56.100+02:002012-10-06T11:46:56.100+02:00Thanks for your feedback Gail. Yes, there always s...Thanks for your feedback Gail. Yes, there always seemed to be a scary house and/or a witch where we lived, usually with loads of cats! I understand your point about the abuse children. I have just lobbed them in at the end, I can weave in some earlier or more poignant reference to them being ignored. Thanks again for your feedback.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17056976416268218470noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2688121174334319382.post-76194347846749534562012-10-04T09:15:09.586+02:002012-10-04T09:15:09.586+02:00Good story , and as usual great writing , i did se...Good story , and as usual great writing , i did see the link with the pied piper a story i remember well from childhood. The old women in the scary house ..of course in all the villages i lived in as a child always was the village outcast ... the " goat lady" was one i remember . The moral of the story for my part only needed to have a little more explaintion of the abused children being overlooked by the villagers,a stronger reason for the lesson (but maybe that shows how acceptable ignorance and being judged on looks has become) .I saw the blonde as the pied piper teaching the people a lesson not important if she was witch .. just a magicaly figure as i believe the pied piper was ..or maybe i need to re read the pied piper haha ..those are my thoughts anyway ...good stuff deborah .GailAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2688121174334319382.post-50414768035621746502012-10-03T20:50:45.462+02:002012-10-03T20:50:45.462+02:00Thank you for your feedback Jan. :)Thank you for your feedback Jan. :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17056976416268218470noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2688121174334319382.post-39529616382421102242012-10-03T20:45:38.228+02:002012-10-03T20:45:38.228+02:00I knew the Pied Piper story from a child and I not...I knew the Pied Piper story from a child and I noticed as I was writing the story, which was a spur of the moment act, that I was tending towards a Pied Piper scenario. It was not a deliberate idea, I did not start with the intention of relating the story to the Pied Piper. And this is why I have asked the questions I have - as the author I was affected by other texts, by cultural influences when writing it so, with hindsight, can a reader tell me that they were upon reading it?Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17056976416268218470noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2688121174334319382.post-80148959870290783542012-10-03T19:47:57.491+02:002012-10-03T19:47:57.491+02:00I did not see the correlation between the two stor...I did not see the correlation between the two stories in the beginning, however, I did understand the old lady to be lonely from the way you described her and the pumpkins and apples part. It did seem obvious when the children were missing that there was a link (although different) to the Pied Piper.<br /><br />Great bit of writing my dear!<br /><br />JanAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2688121174334319382.post-18622373681088807732012-10-03T19:44:12.196+02:002012-10-03T19:44:12.196+02:00Did the writer read The Pied Piper before writing ...Did the writer read The Pied Piper before writing the story or just adapt the story to the Pied Piper so to speak?<br /><br />Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2688121174334319382.post-12312855620059478142012-10-03T18:21:04.138+02:002012-10-03T18:21:04.138+02:00Thanks Jenny. This was as I mentioned before an ex...Thanks Jenny. This was as I mentioned before an exercise in intertextuality, so whilst the story was influenced and affected by my knowledge of the Pied Piper story it was not meant to be a direct retelling of the story. My main interest is to see whether people who have the same reference (Pied Piper) in their knowledge base will pick up on, and be influenced in their interpretation by, that existing reference. <br /><br />Regarding the story itself your comments are helpful in that area too! The 'moral' or message of the story does not appear to be obvious which considering the outcome it needs to be for it have the necessary impact. The characters in the house are also too anti-stereotype, making them obvious too. All in all a worthwhile exercise and I only have your response so far!<br /><br />Thanks again for your input.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17056976416268218470noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2688121174334319382.post-83285936335078445182012-10-03T17:59:02.865+02:002012-10-03T17:59:02.865+02:00I saw everything exactly as you did, except I had ...I saw everything exactly as you did, except I had no doubt that the blonde woman was a witch. I did not make an immediate connection with the Pied Piper, only when you say at the end that the town is called Hamelin. That confused me, as I didn't see how it gelled with the Pied Piper tale, except, of course, for the disappearance of the children. Your explanatory notes sorted that out. <br />Apart from that, I felt I understood it perfectly the first time. I knew that the old witch was just a lonely old woman. I knew the new owner would turn out to be a real witch. When the two children waited outside but didn't go in, I knew something awful was going to happen to the children in the house.<br />Hope this helps.<br />Great story<br />xxx<br />Jenny Twisthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15716569675973035423noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2688121174334319382.post-9225280463630016282012-07-13T16:07:29.270+02:002012-07-13T16:07:29.270+02:00Go for it Matey, I am sure it will be worthy of an...Go for it Matey, I am sure it will be worthy of an award unlike some other none literary mediocre porn that I have just read! xJan Talbotnoreply@blogger.com